Tuesday, May 7, 2013

THREE COINS IN THE FOUNTAIN: Wherein Doreen evokes the ultimate Mid Century Modern Chick Flick to answer the age old Kamikaze Copywriter question: Why three paragraphs?


Sinatra sings the theme song, cast of respected veterans treading relevancy + charming new faces – Rome, glamorous Rome.  If you haven’t seen Three Coins in the Fountain, it’s worth a rainy afternoon and a few hankies.  What’s it got to do with writing Copy?  Thorough information presented artfully enough to encourage participation by its Prospect, no matter the idealized plot (concept) and product (romance).

As is usual when I teach body copy, I’ve given the class the option (this week, at least) of writing some copy.  Three paragraphs, in keeping with Prospect, product, Objective.  Regardless the lesson, I often evoke the Three Paragraph rule.  Why ask for that much (I admit I chuckle when three paragraphs are referred to as “long copy” – if they only knew) from beginners, especially on a first (if optional) assignment? 

Three paragraphs show me a lot about how you think, where your strengths/weaknesses are.  Forces you to consider structure.  Gives room for product information/prospect benefit.  Forces segues, meaningful/memorable closes.  Encourages immediate immersion with little room for long explanations of headline, concept and/or introductory copy.

Writing three paragraphs, well crafted, is the door to the same message conveyed brilliantly in a mere three lines.  It forces you to consider where things go, what information’s important, how to tie into the line/headline without repeating it.  Teaches you the close can’t be a URL and how to keep the whole thing active, energized, motivational and memorable.

First, a warning:  it’s 2013, not the 70s/80s.  Back then, the “formula” for body copy was three paragraphs.  First paragraph, repeat/explain the headline, introduce the next paragraph.  Second paragraph, a discussion of product, including the inevitable laundry list of features/benefits like the real list of features/benefits.  Third paragraph, conclusion, call to action containing a repeat/summation of headline disguised as some sort of call to action.

This “formula” went out with cutting edge Creatives in the 70s, with the 80s for those slower to catch on but still pushing for quality.  Yet you still see it today.  Why?  It’s a logical way to organize.  Like all formulae, its roots are in logic.  Like all creative formulae, it’s boring, predictable and screams been there/done that.

Today, we don't write body copy.  We just write.  Don't talk about the product, just talk product.  We don’t have enough room/Prospect interest/good will to do it that way anymore.  Even when writing really long copy which can spread across multiple web pages, brochures, white papers and traditional media advertising.  

Repeating anything, let alone something as visible/hopefully memorable as the headline, makes today’s Prospect think been there/done that and stop reading.  If you have to explain the headline, it’s not working.  So what goes in the first paragraph?

I don’t care, as long as you don’t waste it.  Find a way to jump right into the motivational sell the headline set you up for.  Often, beginning writers will fill a first paragraph with empty b.s. that gets them to what should really be there, which they put in the second.  I always eliminate those (empty b.s. paragraphs).  When I do, it’s easy to tell it’s not needed.  Something beginners are uncomfortable with doing themselves.

What I look for is an easy flow from first to second.  Segues from paragraph to paragraph.  Language that involves me (the Prospect) right away, from word one.

The second paragraph flows out of the first.  It continues in tone, motivational sell and product information/benefits.  Streams from line to line, “forcing” the reader/Prospect from one line/one thought to the next smoothly.  Giving them no excuse to stop.  Then flowing/creating a logical, smooth segue to the next paragraph/thought.

Third paragraph flows from second.  Continues tone, motivational sell, product info/benefits.  Forces the reader to the close, which is the memorable, motivating, active and uplifting in energy and thought.  A call to action, sure.  It’s part of the last paragraph, but is only the last line when/if it makes sense and doesn’t drag down the energy of the line/paragraph/ad.

All three paragraphs must be free of Copy Sins (especially Next, Then and other words trying to disguise a lack of flow/segue), be active, visual,  conceptual and delivered in a tone/language which speaks directly and motivationally to the Prospect, bringing them to the same conclusion as you (that strong, active, high energy final line).

At this point it’s not about style as much as it’s about maintaining tone, flow, logic of argument, interest, energy.  Keeping your structure simple, logical, interesting.  Your product benefits/information the same.  Follow the Creative Process as it plays out in your KCWP.  Let your Prospect do the same.

Three paragraphs forces two paragraph-to-paragraph segues.  Gives you enough room to play.  To address product.  To engage the Prospect in a conversation within the context of concept, headline, KKF.

Three Coins.  Three paragraphs.  Presented artfully enough to encourage participation/romance your Prospect, no matter the idealized plot and creative strategy.
 
How to nail it:  don’t sweat it.  Don’t worry it.  Watch for creatively hidden redundancies.  Keep  your structure simple.  Remember three paragraphs doesn’t give you room for wasted words, boring the Prospect, b.s.ing what the product’s all about.
 
Blog Posts:  If you’ve already read these, go back and read them again.  Lots of info about writing headlines, writing body copy, editing, Copy Sins, etc.  All the stuff you need to think about when doing the Three Paragraphs assignment.  PLEASE NOTE:  Those 3rd Q CWs attempting to write/edit on your own:  don’t worry, you’ll get lots of help, feedback.  That’s what the :45 minute skype sessions and live class touch-bases (next scheduled for week of 5/19) are for!

8/27/12:  Features, Benefits and Language of Concept (don’t worry too much about Language of Concept at this point – Features and Benefits are what we’re after)
9/11/12:  The Joy is in the Edit (what you want to do before sending me your copy)
11/24/12:  Kamikaze Copy Sins:  Assignment & Results (do the assignment for fun, but study the results)
2/6/13:  Doreen’s Top Twenty All Time Copy Remarks (read the remarks, see where they apply to what you write.  If/when they do, you know you have some editing to do)
4/14/12:  Kamikaze Copy Writing Course Lesson #1: Headlines (should help w/your line choices/edits)
4/16/12:  Tips, Clues, Edits

This post, like everything you read at kamikazecreative.blogger.com, is (c) 2013, Doreen Dvorin/Kamikaze Creative 

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