You’re
on your way home when it hits you. All
this Prospect rules!This and Prospect rules that. For once, you decide that you’d decide and
you decide that if your gonna decide, that you should just do it, right their on they yard if, that is, yore gonna do it. And so you’re gonna
speak directly to your prospect and tell him that’s why you understand him you
are him. So this is the ad that too many
of you experience that is him standing they're. So, in
place of that next post then this is like the ad you write…
Your as tired of all
this advertising than
we are. And you know
are right.
Unfortunately, you
wake up everyday and day and when you get home from work you know yore just
going to repeat you’re day everyday and there’s no thing unique that you can do
about it there in charge, first, too. Of course ewe knew you
yoreself, you’d just do it. So you drive
right in and because its so conveniently located you drive right up and you say
to yore saleman, even in this economy, you want that red Porsche in the showroom in time to provide a
proven drive home and say you’re the man know, really. Regardless, you know that’s why the beautiful,
amazing, and shining example has stuff like surround sound their just going to
love experiencing …next, you buy something of the type of attire that every one who
attains a Porsche is designed to where.
At Doreen's class in the Creative Circus, we believe, that in today’s economy,
you just allow lazy writing and bad
editing because, after all, people, like the ones, who actually read ads, you
will know what that means. But that said
are you quite, certain, that you found all the Copy Sins, or are you,
unfortunately, totally and convincingly and without a doubt up to the task only
because you took Doreen’s class so that’s why you should provide a better
ending than this.
Therefore, I offer to all of you a challenge that, you won't want to pass by. Figure out what Product this copy is figure out what the Objective is. Then, I want all of you to post your edit of the copy in the comments section. For at least eleven of you, you have no option. It's your upcoming homework. For the rest of you... I double dog dare you to give it a shot (copy only is fine, no need to get fancy)
Whew. Maybe the shortest
blog post I’ve written but for the life of me, I just can’t seem to always keep
those Copy Sins coming.
How many’d you find? How many do you, right?